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3/31/2010
Chelsa and the witches
livielovebug Age 9
Texas, United States
Chelsa was a new witch. She was in training. On the first day she met her trainers. There was one named bedcical. She was very ugly and had moles as big as her eyeballs all over her face. Chelsa was suprised that bedcical was even married because she was a grump too. There was another teacher. Her name was Dandilien. She was sweet and kind. The two witches did NOT get along. Chelsa would always do what Dandilien said because she was nice. They would always fight on spells to teach her. Chelsa finally said "ENOUGH! I am SICK AND TIRED of you guys fighting!" From that day on, she turned out to be like... bedcical.
List of Viewer Suggestions
6/12/11
Funkysocaplaya_48 Age 10
Iowa, United States
I think that you should put in more details so that other readers can have a better picture!!!!
6/12/11
Salra Age 12
Trinidad Tobago
NEED MORE WORDS BUT GREAT JOB YOU ARE VERY CREATIVE!
6/12/11
Salra Age 12
Trinidad Tobago
NEED MORE EXPLINATION
5/12/11
Bretty Poo Age 3
Bangladesh
I LOVE THE ENDING!!!
4/23/11
poetryrocks Age 99
California, United States
Wow! it was a great!I thought that part about that witch having eyeball-sized moles was pretty remarkable!
3/23/11
Megan Age 10
England
I don't get it. But still, at least your happy. Why did she turn out like Bednical or whatever her name is?
2/27/11
laffytaffy Age 8
Hawaii, United States
very good but it needs to be pulled out more did Chelsa get in trouble by the witches
1/14/11
Blackberry Age 12
North Carolina, United States
It was a good concept, but I think you should have made it more long indtead of just saying the ending in one sentence. You could have made a Part 1, it was a good story, but you could have said why she ended up like Bedical. Just put more discription into it.
1/12/11
aileen346 Age 9
Massachusetts, United States
Who turned out like bed cicle??? And why???
1/5/11
Shmink Age 11
United Kingdom
Why did she turn out like bedcicle ????
11/17/10
Greengirl Age 11
Arizona, United States
I think you need a little more details, but I LOVED THE WHOLE IDEA! Keep up the good work1
11/17/10
Katluver321 Age 13
Minnesota, United States
awesome! (for a nine year old!)
10/1/10
diorimani Age 11
Pennsylvania, United States
thats cool and really good for a 9 year old
9/19/10
kinster499 Age 12
Washington, United States
i liked it
8/7/10
Alice Age 9
Florida, United States
I liked how you described bedcical. I could picture the warts on her face!
6/24/10
soccergirl55 Age 10
Massachusetts, United States
I think that is super funny but if you want to improve it, here are some suggestions:
1. you might want to add some more details, like when you explained about the witch.
2. you might want to make something exciting happen instead of just have the ending like that
Anyway, great story!
4/16/10
ocie16 Age 11
North Carolina, United States
Sorry, but, I don't get it. Keep trying and have fun!
3/31/10
livielovebug Age 9
Texas, United States
I think its SUPER funny!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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